Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?
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and technology
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the modern
scientists
and technology
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have great importance.
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experts
expert
present
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scientists
and technology
expart
. Many Correct your spelling
expert
experts
scientists
invented lots
of valueable
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valuable
our
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about our
dailylife
without their invention. They give us Correct your spelling
daily life
lots
of essentional
tools.Correct your spelling
essential
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,radio ,landphone
, Correct your spelling
land phone
and phone
handphone
mobilephone
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mobile phone
computer
, vahicals
, medical equipment.Correct your spelling
vehicles
vehicle
amoung
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among
them
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their
computer
is a great electronics device. There are multi benefits
of using Add a hyphen
multi-benefits
computer
. We can do Add an article
the computer
a computer
lots
of thinks
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things
by
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about
this
. For example
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and internet. Besides
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source
of entertainment. Correct article usage
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can watch movie
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a movie
the movie
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him
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technology
exparts
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experts
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essential
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society
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a great
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our daily life. Most Change preposition
on
of
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apply
the
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people
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. By Change the determiner
this app
these apps
this
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these
apps
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,apps
people
can talk with others by video or aduio
call. For entertainment, they produce Correct your spelling
audio
lots
of games. So that scientists
and teachnology
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technology
exparts
have great Correct your spelling
experts
demand
on our era.
On the other hand
, the value
of musicians and artists decrease in socity
. Before Correct your spelling
society
invention
of some Add an article
the invention
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device, Replace the word
electronic
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particularly
television
, mobilephone
and Correct your spelling
mobile phone
computer
they had huge Change the article
the computer
value
on socity
. 20 to 30 years ago they had high Correct your spelling
society
demand
. People
invited them on
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to
for
perform on stage. For Change preposition
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received
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now days
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nowadays
people
use mobile phone or television
for entertainment and a big number of music and magic fan are now love sports like football, cricket, tenis
etc. All most everyday sports Correct your spelling
tennis
television
broadcast live match on tv. So they
spend their time on
watching sports. Change preposition
apply
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is one of the reason
why musicians and artists Change to a plural noun
reasons
value
decrease.
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conclusion
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society
value
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exparts
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