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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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These days boarding
schools
 are increasingly popular, they continue to be rather controversial because the benefits are hard to determine exactly.
This
 essay will discuss the debate
,
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 and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those boarding
schools
 teach personal development activities that can help make friends, become better team players, and improve their self-confidence. Some of these skills
that
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will help your
children
 succeed in any industry.
Secondly
, it is often said that pupils who live in unstable families focus on just their
study
 without any distraction.
Finally
, it would appear that many boarding
schools
 set strict morning and night routines
which
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children
 must obey and follow.
For example
, they have to exercise, no electronic devices during the class and do volunteer work a few hours a week. These strict rules teach
children
 to help build their own future daily life routines. For these
reasons
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 some people advise that boarding
schools
 are the best places for
children
 to
study
.
By contrast
, opponents of
this
view point
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 out that not all
children
 can
study
 in
schools
 that have high tuition costs. In some countries, regular
school
 education is free for their nationals, and there is no pressure for their
parents
 who live in low and
middle income
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 class.
Furthermore
,
this
 is surely a
further
 significant factor that pupils spend a minority of their time with their family, because of boarding
school
 rules. Reducing family times lead to drift apart from
parents
 to
children
’s love attachment or communication. Overall, it is sensible to conclude that
children
's
study
 until their middle
school
 under
parents
' attention, and
then
 maybe high
school
 or college education
enroll
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 in boarding
school
. Of course,
this
 serves the interest of both the
children
 and
parents
 involved.
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