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Young people are getting more influenced by friends than parents or teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that young
people
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 are more influenced by their
friends
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 than their
teachers
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 or
parents
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. They spend more time with their
friends
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. It is quite natural for them to get influenced by the
people
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 they spend time with.
Parents
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 are the biggest influence on
children
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 during the
first
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 few years of their life because young
children
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 don’t get many opportunities to interact with the world outside their family. When they begin to attend school, their
friends
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 begin to play a more important role in their life. Young
children
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 want to dress and behave like their
friends
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.
Friends
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 exert an even bigger influence on teenagers. Teens tend to have a rebellious streak in them. They seek freedom and hate it when
parents
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 or
teachers
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 try to impose restrictions on them. They find the company of their
friends
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 more attractive because
people
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 of the same age groups have similar needs, interests and tastes.
Parents
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 and
teachers
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 often assume the role of advisors. They are well-meaning; unfortunately, teens hate advice. The huge generation gap between
children
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 and their
parents
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 do not help the situation either. Teenagers today have access to a lot of things that their
parents
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 didn’t have when they were young. At
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 age, boys and girls experience an irresistible need to fit in with their group.
This
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 need encourages them to adopt the beliefs and
behaviors
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 of their
friends
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. Since
parents
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 and
teachers
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 do not always agree with them, they find solace in the company of their
friends
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. To conclude, I totally agree with the statement that young
people
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 are more influenced by their
friends
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.
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, I do not feel that
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 is a positive trend because
friends
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 are unlikely to have the unconditional love that
parents
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 have for their
children
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. They
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 lack the worldly wisdom that
parents
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 or
teachers
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 have.

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