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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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It is believed by some that with the growing age
children
 should have to help in the households
chores
 because it is very beneficial for them. I totally agree with the writer’s notion and the reasons behind my inclination are articulated in subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, there are myriad reasons why assisting in the home
tasks
 are essential for teenagers.
Firstly
, it will make
children
 unreliable on their
parents
 on
such
 things like ; cleaning mess, cooking and laundry.Apart from
this
above mentioned
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 skills are much needed if a child wants to study abroad after completing
the
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apply
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secondary level education.
Secondly
, In
present
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 scenario both the
parents
 are working so that they do not get sufficient time to look after households
tasks
 because of
this
 reason it is
common
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a common
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 tendency of
parents
 that they teach their
children
 how to take care of households
chores
.
Furthermore
, helping
in
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home
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the home
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 task
are
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 prove beneficial when the juveniles become adults.
For instance
, after getting married for some reasons a male should have to get divorced
with
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 her wife
then
such
 skills are required.
However
,
parents
 should teach their
children
 about house works to some extent because they have a lot of school homework and other
tasks
 which is much more important
then
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 teaching household
chores
. In conclusion, after considering all the positive side
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effects
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affects
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effects
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 of learning household
tasks
 it is indispensable for the
children
 to attain some knowledge about household
chores
 as it is much needed in the later stages of life.
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