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In Many Countries, Paying For Things Using Mobile Phones Is Becoming Increasingly Common

After the surge of smartphones, their efficiency
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 improves as time passes.
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, in the inception of mobile phones, there was a time when
people
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 were able to use a large number of
apps
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 free of costs, while nowadays
people
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 are buying and paying money for accessing a number of
apps
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 that are now turning increasingly common, whether there are advantages or disadvantages, both views are going to cover in
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 essay. Numerous
apps
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 were freeware that gave many benefits and easy access,
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 as searching the novel location through google maps, having a video conference through google meet, and all social media
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 like Facebook and Instagram.
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, using free
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 were allowing
people
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 to experience eternal features and able to learn new things from them. But, after the proliferation of using
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, now numerous developers decide to provide
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 in payment mode,
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, YouTube which was one time accessible free of cost, but now after the surge of using the paid OTT platform, namely, Netflix and Amazon Prime. Now, YouTube
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 now asking its viewers to pay for watching more videos without ads, and
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 are providing more features
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 as Music Tube and Movies, for attracting
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 to pay monthly fees for allowing them to enjoy free ads, unlimited music, and movies.
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, the majority of the population spends plenty of money on
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 for getting tons of advantages as after paying, they are allowed to experience many features and allow them to escape from the annoying ads.
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, the biggest issues are faced by those, who are not ready to do unnecessary payment due to extortionate rates, where not all can afford,
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, there is difficulty in paying the international expensive price. In conclusion, there is still a half population that cannot spend money on these expensive
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 but still for ingressing, many try their hands-on hacking, where they try to crack or try to hack through changing codes and cookies, which cause the biggest loss to the developers. Henceforth, it is better, if they drop the price of the
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, so that the whole population could able to ingress and will
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