People buy products if it fulfills their need; there is no need for advertisement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it.

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Commericals
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Commercials
play a
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pivotal
role in our everyday life.
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, some believe that consumers buy the
products
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out of necessity rather than being influenced by advertisements. But, I completely disagree with the statement. In my
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the
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commercial
are
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of
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utmost
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outmost
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importance and I will be explaining
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Firstly
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, the
commericial
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commercial
help us to know about the new and existing
products
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being launched by the manufacturers into the market. These
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commericials
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commercials
are very attractive and create
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for the product in nanoseconds. These advertisements do not demand extra time, money or effort
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their customers, as they can be viewed on television and
internet
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while doing any leisure activity. Many people buy these
products
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because of the
chrismatic
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charismatic
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effect by the
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commericials
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commercials
. They help small scale industries to gain recognition and increase their popularity among users.
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, increasing their net sale and thereby, boosting their economy.
In addition
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, the
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commericials
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commercials
generate detailed awareness about the
products
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. They
also
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update us about the offers and the extra benefits beings offered by the company to its new and old
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. They allow us to compare and contrast between
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of items available in the market. These advertisements help us to change our perspective about the product and thereby, increasing the consumer number for that particular product. To conclude, even though the
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commericials
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commercials
may at time succeed to fool their customers but
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out of them are always proven to be more useful and effective.
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, I would suggest the
products
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should be
throughly
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thoroughly
scrutinized for their authenticity before being displayed on
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a public
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platform.
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