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With the increased use of computers, education is being delivered online without teachers. It is likely that there would be no role of teachers in providing education in the future. Do you agree with this view?

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fast-paced life, modern technologies have transformed the methods of teaching. While it is predicted that in the future computers will be a predominant element in
children
's education, I fully believe that the role of
teachers
 can not be superseded with
such
 equipment since
teachers
 have the
abillity
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ability
 to nurture
students
' interpersonal skills as well discover their hidden talents. From my perspective,
teachers
 are irreplaceable figures in the educational system.
This
 is because without their contribution is
next
 to impossible to detect
students
' inborn genius. To be exact, there are some pupils who are not interested in learning math subjects while they are gifted with artistic capacity so
teachers
 by consulting
such
 learners can pave the way for them to reach their required knowledge.
Thus
,
teachers
 can play a vital role in
students
' development since computers are not armed with
such
 capability.
Moreover
,
teachers
 presence not only exposes pupils' talents but
also
 assist them to boost their interpersonal skills.
In other words
,
teachers
 are able to persuade
students
 to join various groups in order to communicate with other peers to practise their face-to-face interaction, which is an essential
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 for
children
 to express their thoughts and feelings.
For example
, a study, conducted by educationalists, shows that the learners who attend classes are more capable of having constructive talks with other people in their adulthood. Despite that, one school of thought claims that with the growth of technologies setting online classes is inevitable for many people because
such
 a system will provide a convenient environment for
children
 to gain needed skills to have a brighter future.
Nevertheless
, What these people fail to see is without emotional supports, which are given by a supervisor
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 computers, treating adept pupil is a far-fetched dream In conclusion, it is an undeniable fact online education will be the principal method for educating
students
 but
such
trend
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 might not help
children
 to flourish their hidden intelligence since there is no
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person as a teacher to understand their feeling and discover their talents.
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