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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#books #internet
Over the past years, we used to get our desired
knowledge
 from
books
. Nowadays, with the advent of technology,
knowledge
 is readily available on
internet
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. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the advantages
initially
 and later the disadvantages. Our great-grandparents and forefathers used to have big libraries in their homes. They did not have any kind of electronic
devices
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 for communication and storing
information
. They struggled to obtain a proper education by learning everything from
books
 and copies.
Moreover
, they used to get explanations of educational problems from their teachers. Undoubtedly, their lives were much of a struggling type than ours. We are lucky enough to get every kind of
information
 from
internet
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.
In addition
, free
pdfs
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 and
e
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books
 are available
on
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 online bookstores. We use these materials for our
benefits
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.
As a result
, we give our best input during exams. So, we expect to obtain a better output at the end.
Furthermore
, online
information
 can be shared fast. More importantly, anyone can share the link of a piece of
information
 over
internet
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 to someone else within seconds.
On the contrary
, there are a few major problems
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 storing
knowledge
 on the
internet
. Purchasing an
internet
 package on mobiles can be expensive
to
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 some people. So, in
this
 case,
books
 can be a cheaper option to get the same amount of
knowledge
. In conclusion, I think getting
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detailed data from
internet
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 is far easier than finding the same data from
books
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization, accessibility, socioeconomic barriers, dissemination, real-time, misinformation, misleading, necessitating, over-reliance, traditional knowledge sources, collaborative learning, interactive, engaging educational experience
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