Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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modern era, entertainment is an essential part of our life especially

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children and

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can lead to developing

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cognitive skills.

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, some believe that a

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time

must be educational-based. I strongly disagree with

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statement for the following reasons.

To begin

with, children should use to their free

time

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recreational activities

instead

of educational because nowadays school

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and they study a lot of subjects.

For example

, the babies can play

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music and drawing when they have

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spare

time

consequently

, they get feel relax. To be more precise, recreational activities can lead to developing the creative mindset who the babies in order to they will be found any new things in future.

Moreover

, education is the most important factor of everyone life but free

time

is only for relaxation

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acedemic

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academic

time

. Sometimes more

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academic

focus can lead to getting boredom

as a result

, the children cannot get

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interest

on studies.

For example

, these days many corporate companies ask job requirements not only needs degree certificate but

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needs any special skills and talent.

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, a child does not focus on studies when he has

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spare

time

because spare moments is

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play

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playtime

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time

. To conclude, I strongly disagree with

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statement because everybody

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entertainment

time

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reduce

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to their's stress level especially the babies.

Therefore

, they should not do any other academical activity when spare moments and enjoy the recreational activities. I hope

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building a cognitive society.

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