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more and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other products from well-known brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Some people think that procuring clothes, electronic devices or other
products
 from famous
brands
 is the way to show off their social position and prosperity.
Besides
, these
brands
also
 ensure
the
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goods of good quality and limit counterfeit
products
 which have lots of bad influences on consumers. In my opinion, I think it is a positive development and I explain the reasons below.
First
 and
for most
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, a man of high position extremely
focuses
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focused
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 on the looks.
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, most celebrities often appear in garments and accessories of eminent designers or brand names
such
 as Gucci, Dior or Hermes.
That is
 the reason why personal possessions reflect wealth, social status and aspect. Because no one can own those items. In short, the
products
 from large
brands
 are suitable for enhancing people's appearance. They
also
 make a
different
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 for the users because of their unique features.
Second
, the goods of well-known
brands
 are expensive but high quality. Luxurious labels are usually sold at an exorbitant price but the users still want to buy them. Because a car from
dominant
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 brand name has more preeminent features than that of
smaller
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 brand. And people will be protected from
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dangerous situations and minimize unexpected accidents.
This
 does not mean that local
brands
 are not good, but you will get what you pay for.
Therefore
, choosing a label suitable for their needs and budgets. In conclusion, with high quality and fashionable designs, the
products
 from well-known
brands
 are more and more attractive to consumers
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