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You want to learn a language. There is a teacher near to where you live.write a letter to the teacher in the letter: say how you came to know about him/her, explain why you want to learn, ask whatbhelp the can offer

#language #teacher #whatbhelp #offer
Dear James. Bond, I am writing
this
 letter to you because I want to learn a new language. Obviously, I
very
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 happy to use your information and
skills
. To be honest, I live in Paris France and I am in your neighborhood. I search for great teachers’
English
 language on social media and in local areas.
Finally
, others prefer you to me. Actually, I prefer you to other people. Recently, I have wanted to migrate to other countries
such
 as Canada and I really have weak
skills
 in the
English
 language.
Overall
, I tried to learn and train my
skills
 so as that pass my IELTS exam.
Additionally
, I request you that help me with teaching
English
skills
. I have been studying
English
 course for the past two years but I completely forgot about It. Thank you for your attention to
this
 matter. I look forward to your prompt response. yours sincerely, Mohsen Ijbari
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize your ideas in distinct paragraphs. This will help make your letter easier to read and understand.
Task Achievement
Ensure your grammar and vocabulary usage is more accurate, as this will enhance your communication.
Task Achievement
The letter effectively conveys the purpose of writing and makes a clear request for help in learning English.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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