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Some people think technology makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #technology #life
There is a drastic change in each and every field due to rapid advancement in
technology
. Some
technology
 is difficult to
undestand
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understand
 or it takes
time
 to learn that
technolgy
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technology
 but it does not mean
than
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that
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 it increases
the
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life
dificulties
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difficulties
.
Nowdays
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, if you
not
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do not
did not
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 follow the trend of
technology
than
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then
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 you would make your
life
 complex rather than using it. So, I surely believe
in
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that use of
technology
 will ease the pressure of
life
 living and my essay will give some examples of it.
Technology
 gave us more
time
 to live in
this
 world and to enhance the beauty of
the
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nature. If we are using the fast car to reach
the
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another destination is
good
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a good
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 way to reduce
time
 and
this
 only happens if we use new cars which
has
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 been made by new
techology
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technology
. Another good
exaple
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example
 of how technical things that
has
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have
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 been
inveted
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invited
invented
invested
 by our
scientis
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scientist
. People who
lives
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live
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 in the
fifteen floor
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fifteen-floor
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 building and he does not want to go through
lift
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life
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 as he thinks that technical
thihngs
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things
 will not
benifited
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benefited
 him than he would
loss
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lose
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 his precious
time
 and
also
 have some more physical load in his body
conversaly
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conversely
 if he would use elevator than both
time
 and health would be saved. If we
not adopted
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have not adopted
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 the
technolgy
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technology
than
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then
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 people would be not able to get fast
transaction
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transactions
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 of banks.
For instance
, as of now
india
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India
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 has announced new
technology
 which has been named as
fasttrack
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fast track
FastTrack
 , which means you not need to wait in the
queaes
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queues
queue
 as
this
fastrack
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Fastrack
FastTrack
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 is linked to the individual person bank, and when he or she
go
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goes
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 through
higway
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highway
 toll-tax than he or she does not need to stop there they just have to pass and money automatically debited from
account
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the account
an account
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 which will reduce
trffic
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traffic
 at toll-taxes. In conclusion,
technolgy
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technology
 made our
life
more
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easier than before.
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