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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity . some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Art
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 is the externalization of the skills of an
artist
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. And in Indian culture
art
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 has
top
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 priority. Because everyone loves to
art
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 worked statue, artwork saree, toys, paintings etc.
artist
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are
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 free of
time
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 but, some people claim that they have total liberty to develop their skill.
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the creator
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creator
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creators
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have
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 their full
time
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 to create and invent their ideas is whole depend upon their priority as well as interest.
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, their
work
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 is in their field so, they
use
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 their full
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 to make
different
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a different
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type
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types
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 of
creation
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creations
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. If
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artist
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the artist
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 is very passionate about their
art
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then
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 he has 24 hours
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time
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 in his hand.
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, at the
time
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 of
lord
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the lord
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 Ganpati festival,
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artist
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artists
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 design different
type
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types
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 of beautiful lord
ganesha
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Ganesha
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statue
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statues
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. They
use
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 their total
time
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 in
work
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 because that
time
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 they are interested.
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, for help to
artist
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 government should try.
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 they form new
policy
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 only for
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the artist
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artist
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artists
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 to motivate them towards their craft.
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, government forward some monthly charge to an
artist
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 account which
help
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 him financially.
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, if
administration
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the administration
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arrange
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arranges
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exhibition
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an exhibition
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 for
designer
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the designer
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 and given
reward
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a reward
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 as
a
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an
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 outstanding
art
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,
then
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, it
encourage
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encourages
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artist
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the artist
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 for their skull.
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, due to rewarding
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artists
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artist
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 they have a competition between them for creating new things.
Equally
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,Equally
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 they are trying to
use
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 their full
time
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 to invent
such
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 a different and unique
art
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 like
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a statue
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statue
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statues
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, designer saree, paintings etc.
their
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they're
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 by heart 100
percent
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 seen in their
art
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.
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, Aishwarya Rais saree which seen a good designer look.
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, The Mona Lisa is a half-length portrait painting by Italian
artist
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 Leonardo da Vinci. Considered an archetypal masterpiece of the Italian Renaissance, it has been described as "the best known, the most visited, the most written about, the most sung about, the most parodied
work
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 of
art
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 in the world"
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, I conclude that
,
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 being an
artist
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 has so many skills in their mind.
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, they try to present in front of people via exhibitions. And if they are passionate
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 they
use
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 their valuable
time
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 towards their
work
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • creativity
  • freedom of expression
  • innovative
  • ethical considerations
  • societal morals
  • unregulated
  • provoke thought
  • controversy
  • government regulation
  • censorship
  • diverse perspectives
  • artistic expression
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