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Some believe that people will purchase a product based on their needs and advertising is not needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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While some consider the purchasing habit of customers is depended on their actual
requirement
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,
commercials
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 have nothing to do with it. In my opinion, advertisement is highly essential,
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, consumers rarely aware
about
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of
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 new products in the market and buy them.
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 and foremost,
commercials
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explains
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 the benefits of the brand in an astonishing manner. Eventually, the potential buyers understood
about
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apply
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the items and tend to buy them. In
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 modern time, there are many pieces of equipment, which makes life more comfortable, are popularised by adverts: microwave over, fridge and air conditioners and so on,
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.
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, it is clear that
commercials
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 have the potential to ignite accurate
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 to mankind wants.
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, it may be rarely argued that if
people
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 had requirements, they would purchase items.
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 argument is often agreed to a certain extent, but without knowing the latest trends and fashion, the consumers may not find accurate products. To illustrate
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,
people
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 living in remote villages hardly expose to the latest gadgets due to
lack
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the lack
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 of penetration of adverts in the area.
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, if they had been advertised about modern gadgets, they would have been lived an extraordinary life now. In conclusion, even though there are some
people
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 who think that when
necessity
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the necessity
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 arises mankind buy products, so adverts are unnecessary, I firmly consider
commercials
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 are essential to publish various new launches in markets and inform their advantages over others. It is predicted that
growth
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the growth
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 of any economy is deeply rooted in the buying habits of the
people
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.
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