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Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve a better balance?

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 there are several stumbling blocks between
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 and personal
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 few masses believe that it is extremely problematic to stabilize it.
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 type of situation and highlight a few drawbacks for it. On the one hand, there are several issues to unstable
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, to embark with the key reasons to support my ideology is that
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 working is extremely vital to provide the bread and butter to family members. These days working hours have been extended due to several reasons
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 less time management, not proper co-ordination between team meats or could be the reason
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 lack of management leads to detrimental effects on physical or mental health like obesity,
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, or anxiety, stress and so on.
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, people can resolve these difficulties by taking some advanced measures. Mostly in IT companies 9 hours is the shift timing whereas individuals get 1 hour for lunchtime. Few people get late to the office
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 they could not accomplish project deadlines
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 they have piled up tasks. As a matter of fact, they not able to spend time with their loved ones.
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, it is not neglectable the fact that all these long working hours cause to tremendously harm individuals health. Despite all these, problems it has some solutions especially the time management for all the
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 to save from piled-up
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 along with healthy diet, regular exercise, meditation to calm mind, which would definitely reduce office pressure and maintain the balance between personal
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 and office
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. To conclude, considering above mentioned points it is evident that, punctuality is the significant factor in
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 which maintain equivalence in the job and diversity of our lie.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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