In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

All the businesses around the world try to be sucсesful and purchased the advertising and present their goods as something incredible. Publicity is one of the interesting ways to illustrate
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excellent
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but in real
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we can see another.
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my opinion,
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method may not bring a stable income to the producers and the customers probably have been manipulated by false promises. Due to the marketing is excellent to present goods and low costs.
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the quality will be disgusted but not always. What
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mean by
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is that people try to rid of their products and earn some
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, once I order the gadget from
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and it does not come as in the picture
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was
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disappointed
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hate
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advertisement that comes to me.As
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mention it all was
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ploy. On the other side, publicity has a positive wave as
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apply
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marketing, scrolling the channel and some movement. We have
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big companies as Adidas Puma LV and so on. More people claim that they have
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excellent and
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marketing ploy and
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they are
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enormous
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companies with
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name
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and all people in the world try to
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receive
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products
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. In conclusion, despite the short-term advantages to the brand, in
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reality
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advertising about how they are different from others is not really make any benefits in
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terms
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to both buyers and sellers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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