Success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a good measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not?

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It is an undeniable fact that wealth is a necessity to survive in
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world. Nowadays, an increasing number of individuals tend to evaluate someone's
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with how much
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he or she made. In
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essay, I will explain that despite recognising the fact that
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riches are crucial to have a prosperous
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, they are not reliable parameters to determine
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success
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, and will
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explain that having a supportive family and a dream
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are two of several other factors to
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evaluate
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in
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of us has been trying to grow our bank balance in order to be happy. Apparently,
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should be directly proportional to
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materialistic
success
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,
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,
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is not the case; when it comes to multi-millionaires. "
Money
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cannot buy
happiness
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" so the saying goes. According to
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research conducted by the psychology department of the University of Manchester,
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of the individuals who avail the services of the psychologists with the
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of being dejected, depressed and suffering from mental health disorders, are
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the wealthiest
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of all. Adding to
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point, another relevant example is of
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social media stars including Justin Bieber and Dixie
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, with billions of dollars in their accounts, yet most of them have been to psychiatric institutes
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the discontentment they face all the time. Irrefutably,
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a plethora
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of
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cannot be considered directly related to the
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of an individual.
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, a supportive and sympathetic family have always been a reliable parameter in regards to assessing triumphs in someone's
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.
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they are not always going to provide you with the abundance of materialistic luxury, they can always offer encouragement, which ultimately results in
happiness
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and
success
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.
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to
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, having a dream
job
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regardless of the amount of
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is one of the most prominent
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to bring
happiness
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. According to a survey in the US and Canada, 90%
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of people
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with the
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they always dreamt of, consider themselves happy and successful; even if it offers them
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national wage. Materialistic
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without contentment is just a hollow business scheme, which ultimately
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can not
be of long-term use. In conclusion, where
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has its own value, it cannot always assess
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in someone's
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,
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, having a family and a satisfactory dream
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are
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always going to be two of the most certain parameters to evaluate
success
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.
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