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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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The two drawings illustrate the changes of the Southwest
airport
 before and after the redevelopment of
gates
 and facilities. It is clear that there are significant changes after
this
 construction. Not only more
gates
 are increased , but
also
 a number of facilities are built in the
airport
. The new
airport
 has become a middle scale one
instead
 of a small
airport
. Before redevelopment, there are two entrances respectively for the usage of departure and arrival in the
airport
. Due to the size extension and the footprint
increasement
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increment
, the entrances rise to four and remain at
the
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their
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 original positions.
Furthermore
,
although
 the lobbies are kept for the same space
of
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as
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 the current ones, adding some new facilities
such
 as bag drop, cafe, ATM, car hire are designed in the front part of the halls.
Also
, shops are located in between security
check
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 and
gates
.
However
, the layout changes fairly large after the building is extended in the areas of
gates
. The number of
gates
 is increased from eight to eighteen, with a sky train linked to the nearest
gates
 to far-away ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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