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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers on books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
It is argued that the number of people
tends
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 to read
the
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digital books through technological equipment which does not purchase the fee,
instead
 of using the physical
materials
. Personally, I completely
agree
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this
 statement. On the one hand, technology is increasing based on the need of humans these days. From
this
 point, people tend to use the digital book by reading
this
 on the website or social media. It is no doubts true that
this
 kind of material brings many benefits which reduce the amount of money to buy some physical books or newspapers directly on a bookstore. It
also
 saves our time to gain information online. Take the example of, when the student has to do some homework related to some researchers.
They
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 able to search some information on a various website which is free in order to meet the demand of finding some details to complete
this
 homework,
instead
 of spending an amount of time and money to buy a wide range of traditional
materials
 to find some information. Simultaneously,
this
 kind of book is costly as well as it is not suitable for the student’s fund. When we use E-book which it means the environmental damaging will reduce due to the fact that producing a large paper to print some traditional material
such
 as
the
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physical books from cutting the tree lead to destroying the natural environment seriously.
On the other hand
, the traditional
materials
 will suitable for age diversify.
This
 is due to the fact that the elders have lack of technological ability to use the equipment. It is easy for reading traditional
materials
for
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them
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.
Moreover
, reading tradition book will reduce the health problems which related eyes. Nowadays, the percentage of people who have myopia problem more. And overusing technology equipment is the main reason. To sum up, I am favour of reading E-book which brings many benefits for our life. And in the future, it may supersede the traditional
materials
 because of the convenience
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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