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International travel brings benefits to travellers and the countries visited, but it also causes problems for the environment. Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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Travelling abroad is an integral part of our lives, whether it is for pleasure or for work. So, some believe that travelling causes harm to the environment while others argue, that it is beneficial for a
country
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's prosperity.
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, I believe that the benefits of international travel outweigh the effect it renders on the environment. On one hand, some
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 believe that aeroplanes are among the most prominent causes of
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pollution
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 because of carbon dioxide emissions.
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 is one of the main
disadvantage
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 of
traveling
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 to international destinations.
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, according to
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research when we accumulate all the cars that are driven in
main
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 urban
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, their emissions are far greater than a single aeroplane.
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, it can be deduced that aeroplanes are not the most crucial reason for
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pollution
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.
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, more planes in the sky
does
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 not equal more
pollution
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.
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, the benefits of
traveling
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travelling
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 abroad are far greater than the drawback of
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pollution
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.
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, vacationers, tourists, holidaymakers, explorers and travellers bring revenue to
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 economy
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 and create
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a numerous
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number of
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jobs for local
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 so that, they can support themselves.
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, the contribution of tourism or business travel in the economy of turkey is more than 50
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.
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 means that a majority of
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 are employed in the tourism and hospitality sector.
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, the government
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 earns revenue in the form of taxes collected from travellers or tourists.
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, countries
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 as Malaysia, Indonesia, Thailand and Maldives
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 rely on tourism for the development of their economies.
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, another advantage is the different
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 from around the world experience the host
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's culture and heritage. They learn the customs, traditions, rites, rituals and cuisines of the place.
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, the host
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 gains
favourable
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 reputation. In conclusion, I believe the advantages of
internation
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international
 travel
outweight
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outweigh
 the disadvantage.
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, travelling to foreign destinations do contribute to
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air
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pollution
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 but it results in
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dissemination
discrimination
dissimination
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the dissimination
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 of
culture
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the culture
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 and economic prosperity of
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the home
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country
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.
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