Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Several people claim that studying in university is not necessary to them if they can go straightaway to

work

they can earn some money and be happy, while

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think that after

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graduating

university

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from university

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they will get

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job

with their profession and high salary.

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I think that we should

study

and

work

in our profession.

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graduating

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from university

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university

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you can not be sure about

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guarantee

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job

if you

are not

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are not studying

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study

at all. You should

study

and show results and good appraisals

,

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than

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then

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you can be confident.

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percentage

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between people with excellent

study

and bad who try to find

good

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job

is huge . So can be

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the solution

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of

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the issue

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. Due to the

money

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people stop to

study

and think that they can do some business or find

good

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a good

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job

without diploma and knowledge.

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words

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i

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mean that they

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a small percentage to find

good

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a good

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job

and create

successful

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a successful

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business.

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have a friend his name is Billy and he left his school when he was

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9th grade and

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he

start

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to

work

for

small

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a small

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amount of money and 7 hours a day and achieved nothing.

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killed the desire to

work

without

diploma

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a diploma

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. In conclusion,

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strongly recommend

to

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apply

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studying and learning

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the subject

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subject

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as well as you can .