Some people say that school studies are not useful and most important things are learnt outside the school. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples.

Nowadays,
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school
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schools

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are not successful and students prefer to learn things in
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centre. I believe that
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generation study usefully outside the
school
and I will support my opinions with examples.
Firstly
, children improve their mind by themselves and it has many positive influences. A good illustration of
this
is
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a self
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self study
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which
give
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gives

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experience and knowledge. They have more motivation to develop in education. Another reason why I agree with it and that students choose their educational
time
in
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at

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anytime.
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, they cannot start to have
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lesson and
then
children can manage their
time
to start to study anytime.
On the other hand
, there is an argument that students can lose their free
time
on
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apply

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playing computer games
instead
of studying in secondary
school
. For
instances
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, they have a choice
such
as studying themselves who can not control their
time
and it can have negative aspects
such
as are not keeping up with
school
. For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that educating themselves
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considarebly
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considerably

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more prosperous than studying at
school
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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