Some people say that school studies are not useful and most important things are learnt outside the school. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples.

Many people claim that
school
is not necessary for pupil and
parends
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parents
said that they spend their time as well as talking with
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while other think that
school
can give good communication and some confidence. Personally, I
am not agree
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with
this
statement that
school
is not useful and I will try to defend my point of view. Due to the
school
pressure
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pupils will be discipline as well as
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excellent
comunication
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communication
with people.
However
, they
also
can learn something new and take knowledge from
teacher
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the teacher
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.
For example
,
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teacher
theacher
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always conducts the topic and even if you do not want to listen you will hear something new or read anyway. For
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reasons we can judge and give our thoughts, in my
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I
totaly
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agree and
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on
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studying and secondary
school
.
On the other
hand
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money can stop
the
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people to study and think that they can do some business or find
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job without
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and knowledge.
In other
words
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i
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mean that they
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a small percentage to find
good
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job and create
successful
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business.
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,
i
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have a friend his name is Billy and he left his
school
when he was
at
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9th grade and
than
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he
start
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to work for
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amount of money and 7 hours a day and achieved nothing.
This facts
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killed the desire to work without
diploma
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a diploma
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In conclusion,
i
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strongly recommend
to
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studying and learning
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the subject
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subject
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as well as you can .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured learning
  • critical thinking
  • intellectual curiosity
  • interpersonal skills
  • extracurricular activities
  • practical knowledge
  • self-taught
  • informal learning
  • financial literacy
  • emotional intelligence
  • work experience
  • apprenticeships
  • theoretical knowledge
  • well-rounded education
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