Some people say that school studies are not useful and most important things are learnt outside the school. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples.
Many people claim that
school
is not necessary for pupil
and parents said that they spend their time as well as talking with a classmate while other think that Fix the agreement mistake
pupils
school
can give good communication and some confidence. Personally, I do not agree with this
statement that school
is not useful and I will try to defend my point of view.
Due to the school
, pressure pupils will be discipline as well as excellent communication with people. However
, they also
can learn something new and take knowledge from the teacher. For example
, the theacher
always conducts the topic and even if you do not want to listen you will hear something new or read anyway. For Correct your spelling
teacher
this
reasons we can judge and give our thoughts, in my Correct determiner usage
these
opinion
I totally agree and confident in studying and secondary Add the comma(s)
,opinion
school
.
On the other hand
, money can stop the
people to study and think that they can do some business or find Correct article usage
apply
good
job without Change the article
a good
diploma
and knowledge. Correct article usage
a diploma
In other
words
I mean that they Add a comma
,words
has
a small percentage to find Change the verb form
have
good
job and create Change the article
a good
successful
business. Add an article
a successful
For example
, I have a friend his name is Billy and he left his school
when he was at
9th grade and Change preposition
in
than
he Replace the word
then
start
to work for Change the verb form
starts
small
amount of money and 7 hours a day and achieved nothing. Add an article
a small
the small
This facts
killed the desire to work without Change the determiner
This fact
These facts
diploma
In conclusion, Add an article
a diploma
i
strongly recommend Change the capitalization
I
to
studying and learning Change preposition
apply
Add an article
the subject
subject
as well as you can .Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite