Some people say that school studies are not useful and most important things are learnt outside the school. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples.

Many people claim that
school
is not necessary for
pupil
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and parents said that they spend their time as well as talking with a classmate while other think that
school
can give good communication and some confidence. Personally, I do not agree with
this
statement that
school
is not useful and I will try to defend my point of view. Due to the
school
, pressure pupils will be discipline as well as excellent communication with people.
However
, they
also
can learn something new and take knowledge from the teacher.
For example
, the
theacher
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teacher
always conducts the topic and even if you do not want to listen you will hear something new or read anyway. For
this
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reasons we can judge and give our thoughts, in my
opinion
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I totally agree and confident in studying and secondary
school
.
On the other hand
, money can stop
the
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people to study and think that they can do some business or find
good
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job without
diploma
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a diploma
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and knowledge.
In other
words
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I mean that they
has
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a small percentage to find
good
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job and create
successful
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business.
For example
, I have a friend his name is Billy and he left his
school
when he was
at
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9th grade and
than
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he
start
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to work for
small
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amount of money and 7 hours a day and achieved nothing.
This facts
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killed the desire to work without
diploma
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a diploma
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In conclusion,
i
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strongly recommend
to
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apply
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studying and learning
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the subject
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subject
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subjects
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as well as you can .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured learning
  • critical thinking
  • intellectual curiosity
  • interpersonal skills
  • extracurricular activities
  • practical knowledge
  • self-taught
  • informal learning
  • financial literacy
  • emotional intelligence
  • work experience
  • apprenticeships
  • theoretical knowledge
  • well-rounded education
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