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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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In the
last
 decades, the world suffers from different
problems
 because of the increasing growth in traffic and pollution. One suggested solution to tackle these
problems
 is to
increase
 the petrol price. Personally, I strongly disagree with these
solutions
, because there are more efficient
solutions
, and
this
 essay will discuss some of these
solutions
.
to begin
 with,
increase
 the price of petrol is definitely an awful solution to encounter these
problems
. After
this
, many public and private sectors including the individual
people
 themselves will face various kinds of economic
problems
. Some
people
,
for example
, could not afford their monthly liabilities, because increasing the oil price means increasing the cost in the most economic sectors,
such
 as transportation, electricity, agriculture, clothes and many other public services, and
this
 lead to a direct
increase
 in the poverty rate,
furthermore
 a vast
increase
 in the gap between rich
people
 and poor
people
.
In contrast
, smart and effective
solutions
 can decrease the growth of traffic and pollution
problems
 without harming the economic side. the
first
 solution is to impose the driver to use modern technologies and to ensure a periodic check to reduce the bad emissions from their car. the
second
 one is to encourage
people
, especially those who use their cars for short distances and local, to buy electric cars, which are friendly environmental cars. the
third
 one is to enlighten the
people
 about the real threat of the bad extensive consumption of fossil fuel.
thus
, they have to pay vast attention to their usage as can as possible.
Finally
, we have to face these
problems
 as a unit, because an individual's effort is not enough to deal with these issues. to conclude, I totally disagree with increasing the oil cost to face the growth of traffic and pollution dilemmas.
furthermore
, we have to introduce effective
solutions
 and immediately start working with these
solutions
 as soon as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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