Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
While many are of the opinion that sentencing convicts to prison
is
the most effective way of dealing with them, others would argue, and I totally concur, that rehabilitationChange the verb form
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as well as skill acquisition training
are the best means of assisting these people. Add the comma(s)
, as well as skill acquisition training,
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essay will explain further
on these points.
On the one hand, sending them to prison instantly stops their anti-social behaviour as proposed by many. However
, I do not agree with this
claim. They are of the suggestion that by convicting these criminals, they would be separated from their prey's community and can no longer carry out their activities. For example
, in Nigeria, following the arrest of the notorious leader of the heardmen
group in the northern part of the nation, their activities dropped significantly. Due to the fact that Correct your spelling
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detatches
them from their prey, some are of the opinion that Correct your spelling
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is the best way to deal with them. However
, this
is not so, as there is high
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On the other hand
, some would argue and I concur that rehabiliting
these criminals as well as teaching them new skills would help them become better citizens than merely restricting their movement. Correct your spelling
rehabilitating
For instance
, due to the benefit
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offers, most prisoners in the developed countries are been persuaded to picked
up a skill and take up subjects in mental health. There are so many reasons why people commit Change the form of the verb
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, while some are pre-meditated, others are not . Whatever be the reason, re-educating these Fix the agreement mistake
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law breakers
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a better
person
.
In conclusion, despite the fact that some individuals would opine that confining these law-breakers is the most superior means to Fix the agreement mistake
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