Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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the most effective way of dealing with them, others would argue, and I totally concur, that rehabilitation
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are the best means of assisting these people.
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on these points. On the one hand, sending them to prison instantly stops their anti-social behaviour as proposed by many.
However
, I do not agree with
this
claim. They are of the suggestion that by convicting these criminals, they would be separated from their prey's community and can no longer carry out their activities.
For example
, in Nigeria, following the arrest of the notorious leader of the
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group in the northern part of the nation, their activities dropped significantly. Due to the fact that
this
detatches
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detaches
detached
them from their prey, some are of the opinion that
this
is the best way to deal with them.
However
,
this
is not so, as there is
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tendency of re-offending following their release back into
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society.
On the other hand
, some would argue and I concur that
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rehabilitating
these criminals as well as teaching them new skills would help them become better citizens than merely restricting their movement.
For instance
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this
offers, most prisoners in the developed countries are been persuaded to
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up a skill and take up subjects in mental health. There are so many reasons why people commit
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a crime
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crime
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, while some are pre-meditated, others are not . Whatever be the reason, re-educating these
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has been proven to be useful in making them
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person
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. In conclusion, despite the fact that some individuals would opine that confining these law-breakers is the most superior means to
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their excesses, others propose and I support that they should be re-educated and taught new jobs as
this
would produce more positive effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Recidivism
  • Reintegration
  • Vocational training
  • Incarceration
  • Deterrent
  • Correctional facilities
  • Reformative justice
  • Social reentry
  • Ex-offender
  • Criminal justice system
  • Restorative practices
  • Penal system
  • Social marginalization
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