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Some people believe that the museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the entry fee for students who are under 18 should be levied for the
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 to historical sites and
museums
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. I agree with
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 statement because high fees will exclude many
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 to
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 these
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 and students will get a chance to explore
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 they study in books.
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 with,
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 often have high fees to
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. Most parents cannot afford to pay for these visits on top of their household and
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 expenses.
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,
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, whose parents do not have enough money, are excluded from the visitors’ lists resulting in many not able to see the sculptures made by their country’s legends.
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, in Singapore, the state sponsor all
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children
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 to
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 so that they can get a chance to see artefacts build by the prominent sculptors of the nation.
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, others might say that
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 would put an extra burden on the government’s financial resources.
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, students in the
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 are taught about the heritage sites which were important in the past.
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, for a better understanding of the historical significance of a particular place, visiting that place would put up a strong impression on the mind and can be remembered for a long time.
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, a study by Cambridge University found that the people who went on excursion trips during
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 time are 70% more likely to remember the history of a place than the people who did not n conclusion,
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 essay agrees that trips to
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 and historical sites should be free for
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 who are below 18 because
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 entry fees are quite high which cannot be paid by many and
children
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 can learn better when they
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 historical
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 as a person

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