Government should invest more money in science education rather than other subjects to develop the country. Do you agree or disagree?

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Accidents are one of the causes of depopulation in developing countries. It is thought that giving stringent

punishments

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to offenders would reduce accidents. In my opinion, I completely agree with that thought, because

people

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commit mistakes as they are taking things for granted.

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, most of the accidents are happening because of negligence while driving.

Particulary

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, in the developing countries,

people

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does

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not obey the traffic rules as there are not

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strict

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. Unlike developed countries, where they have technologies in place to identify persons breaking the traffic

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to punish them.

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, many advanced economic

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countries

have

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camera at signals to capture photographs of cars that

violates

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red signal and they would be punished at

later

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point with the evidence captured.

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, to implement these technologies in developing and

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countires

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countries

would be a huge problem as it

inccur

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incur

massive costs.

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this

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is all about

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mindset.

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, many

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countries

have

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degree of

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for serious crimes and

people

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will not dare to commit those crimes. Whereas, when it comes to driving

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, it is not taken so seriously and

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the penalty charges imposed are

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very low.

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people

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will not take these

laws

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very seriously.

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, creating awareness by including traffic/driving

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in school subjects and campaign the effects of breaking

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would help but

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that's

that

for the longer term as it would take time to see the results.

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, in my opinion, relatively harsh

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and more fines are required to bring down

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driving

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so that

people

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take these

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more seriously and adopt

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them

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. Because

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it does not affect only the individual who

disobey

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but

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others on

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the roads

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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