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The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from the school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

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It is argued that family
education
 influences us better than school
education
. It seems to me that the most important foundation of
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 we become in the future depends on what kind of family we grew up with and what we were doing with.
Firstly
, family
education
 is the base
education
 and
parents
 can be the
first
 teachers we meet. Each member of the family has their own characteristics and
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.
Children
 can easily absorb it, especially from their
parents
.
For
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children
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in
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 early
ages
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 usually are visual learners. They learn everything through their observation skills. If
children
 grow up in hazardous situations, they have mental breakdowns in consciousness. They avoid others and prefer to be alone. Growing up in a loving and caring family leads to better mental health for
children
. They can have fun with others and can easily find friends.
Secondly
,
parents
 can be the main inspiration for their
children
. The study shows that what
parents
 do is pivotal for their
children
's development. It
also
 assessed that childhood experience reflects on self-regulation and self-emotional skills once they grow up.
In particular
cases
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children
 have better engage with their
parents
 and do activities
such
 as reading books, visiting museums and going to parks can make a positive difference compared to
children
 who do not do anything with their
parents
. Admittedly, I agree that school
education
 is the main opportunity for
children
 to socialize and have academic
education
 through
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qualified teachers. Despite
this
, it seems that
children
 spend most of
the
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 time with their family and it has to be the main role for their lives. To summarize, family involvement in
children
’s
education
 is an essential part of what kind of person they become. Both family background and childhood experiences determine mental and physical health.
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