Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In
this
day and age, advertising plays a vital role in
development
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business.
Therefore
, it is frequently asserted that the
customers
are able to
drawn
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to purchase things by advertising. The opponents claim that advertising is so prevalent but it
have
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no a strong influence on
customers
for a long time. There are arguments on both sides of
this
very topical debate, which I will discuss now. On the one hand, those who support the idea of the
advertisement
is the best way to persuade the guest to buy the commodities point out the fact that the brand position of merchandises
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able to do via the
advertisement
.
For instance
, the
advertisement
inspires the information of
product
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for
customers
.
This
is why the
customers
will get the product details,
such
as
:
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benefits, applications,
message
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messages
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and so on.
Furthermore
, it is to be true that the commodities are likely to increase the interaction with the guests through the
advertisement
. Because of the fact that the
advertisement
will
be recurred
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and people can see wherever. For
this
reason, the product will be remembered in the guest’ memory.
On the other hand
, the supporters of the
advertisement
are not able to attract the customer’ s attention in
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long time often state that there
are
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a variety of tedious
advertisement
which has difficulty in drawing the long attention. It is inevitable that the content of
advertisement
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the advertisement
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is not
impressed
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for
customers
and even it is not able to express the function of goods.
Moreover
, it seems that the corporation may opt for
wrong
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communication channels.
For example
, the
merchandises
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is possible to be inspired via
the
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channels
that
is
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not well-known and
is
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not watched by
costumers
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. To sum up, it appears to me that the stronger argument is in favour of advertising which is genuinely successful at convincing the costumers to purchase the goods, with all the advantages of the brand position and the increasing
interactive
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.
This
is provided that it have
a
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great content.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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