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a lot of place in the world are rely on tourism as they think it is main source of income .unfortunately tourism can be a problem if it is not well managed . what are the advantages and disadvantages.?

#place #world #tourism #source #income
There is no
dyning
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denying
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dying
 fact that the phenomenon of a lot of places in the world
rely
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 on tourism as
main
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 source of income and it is ubiquitous across the globe due to its paramount .Important one school of thought opine that it is worthless ,
however
 other
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 that a couple of
problem
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also
occure
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occurs
occur
 because of the same .
Although
 ,
this
 has a plethora of merits which will be elaborated
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upcoming
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 paragraph. Initiating with the best possible benefits ,the most significant advantages is country economy become strong in future in terms of tax , transport and local
bussiness
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business
businesses
. To cite an example, in 2015
the
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Singapore
declaired
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declared
 that due to
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry
theit
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that
the
their
groth
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 increase
uoto
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to
up to
 19% in each and every field of
nation
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. On the
paradroxical
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paradoxical
 site, there are many drawbacks as well .
first
 and foremost pollution level increasing day by day due to higher
tourismm
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tourism
.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
 , every tourist higher personal car for
travellinhg
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travelling
 .
Secondly
, the waste of food is
main
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 problem of that
perticular
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particular
 country because traveller
do
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 not get
same
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the same
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 taste of
theit
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their
that
the
 country. Having gone through the matter in some detail it can
be conclude
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 that,
this
 is a
mix
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 bug .
This
 topic has many positives
then
 the negative point of
this
 nation may not be underestimated and
i
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 would like to say tourist should
co operate
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cooperate
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 with government and use
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the eco
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eco friendly
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 product so it would be beneficial for all.
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