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With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating too regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is to ban it completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Eating fast meals becomes a trend in the past few years in Asian countries
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 as Sri Lanka,India,Pakistan,Bangladesh same as in European countries. The increasing number of fast-food food chains
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 as Macdonald, Burger King, Domino's, Pizza Hut indicated the rise in fast drink consumption. The busy lifestyle of these days caused to increasing fast cuisine consumption than earlier. That makes the community ended up with several fitness concerns at a young age like cholesterol, blood pressure, cancers etc. To get rid of that fitness problem, most doctors are recommended to ban those foods completely. But my point is, totaly banned fast meat is a compulsory thing for people who suffer from several well-being concerns. But for the people who have to not suffer from any kind of energy topic they can have fast foodstuff but to some extent.
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 as having those once a week, two times per month like that. Because generally younger people always wanted to go outing with friends and teenagers mostly preferred to having a fast meal. So having fast cuisine is not a bad thing but having them regularly makes them unhealthy. Everyone has to get rid of regular fast cuisine habits as it makes several energy questions in future.
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