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Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor.

#arguments #debate #conclusion #side #favor
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Most people agree that smoking should be prohibited by
law
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. Even though
smoke
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-free
law
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 has a lot of benefits in all sectors of life, we should consider
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 argument on both sides. On the
on
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 hand, scientific evidence proves that anti-smoking legislation decreases all kinds of death related to
smoke
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 and lead to better national health.
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World
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the World
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 Health Organization, the number of deaths in
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-banned countries
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 as Australia and Austria has dramatically decreased, and its population is increasing year by year thanks to legislation.
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, implementing these bans all around the world assists not only smokers but
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 protects everyone from
second- hand
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smoke
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. Every year one out of ten non-smokers die from second-hand
smoke
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.
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, opponents of the
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 against smoking contribute the idea that the
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 is conflicted
to
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 democratic countries where human rights
cared
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 the most. They believe that it's their choice whether they
smoke
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 tobacco or not in public places.
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, critics of the
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 stress that how can authorities control human smoking habits even
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if
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smokers
could not
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 control themselves? Smoking or not is just up to them, and it is about ethics. In conclusion, I am with those who oppose the
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 against smoking.
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 of controversial restrictions and any laws, they should provide enough private rooms or any extra space in any public place.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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