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Nowadays the most important task is the environmental protection of our planet for future generations. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#protection #planet #future #generations
The earth atmosphere is the key factor for living. To make life possible on earth for the upcoming generation it becomes the duty of every individual to take crucial steps regarding
soil
 erosion, deforestation and fossil fuels. I totally agree with
this
 statement and discuss the steps to protect the environment.
To begin
 with, aware the
people
 about the different kinds of pollution known as air, water and
soil
. For
this
 , provides seminar in a rural and urban area so that
people
 should use fewer fossils fuels, raw materials that affect the nature.
For instance
, every individual should use more public transportation
instead
 of their own vehicles which causes more air pollution.
Moreover
, educated the masses about the effect of deforestation. In many countries, the graph shows that area of forest is decreases rapidly to build more roads and shelters which directly affect the weather conditions, reduces the level of water and
also
 the major problem for the extinction of wildlife species.To overcome
such
 problem growing more and more trees in areas. India is setting the example where every person taking participate to plant one tree. Another significant factor is global warming which spread more greenhouses gases in the environment. It is predicted that every ten of eight newborn babies have a complication of breathing because of the lower level of oxygen. Apart from
this
, it
also
 studied that the issue of
soil
 erosion
also
 increasing day by day. It becomes very difficult for the new generation to grow valuable crops, seeds for their eating.
People
 should stop using chemical substances
instead
 of natural fertilizers
such
 as ash, animal waste which helps the
soil
 to be more fertile. To illustrate, countries like India facing the obstacle of land deformation at very high rates. To be concluded that, the government of every nation should take strict action against the problem so that
people
 should aware of the fundamental aspects of nature for a living. It's our responsibility that we should save our planet so our future generation will
also
 live a healthy life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • paramount
  • safeguarding
  • well-being
  • prosperity
  • detrimental
  • sustainable
  • encompasses
  • combating
  • preserving
  • reducing
  • pollution
  • sustaining
  • counterpoint
  • pressing
  • interconnectedness
  • technological advancements
  • innovations
  • renewable energy
  • waste management
  • eco-friendly
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