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The only reason people work hard is money. There are no other reasons to do it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A part of society claims that individuals only put effort to work to be well paid.
This
 essay will outline a partial disagreement with
this
 trend because even though there are other motivations that encourage workers to do their duties with
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,
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 and reaching
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job satisfaction, money is
also
 a reason.
To begin
 with, there are those who just enjoy being helpful.
For instance
, NGO’s volunteers are in the majority
hardworkers
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hard workers
 even without receiving any wage or rewarding for the activities performed. Many individuals, as those fighting for
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, feel blessed only by helping less fortunate ones.
Moreover
, another cogent reason that pushes people to work with passion is having job satisfaction. Not everyone seeks to enrich or live a lifestyle based on purchase trending objects. Some are elated with their careers, despite the
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 salary received with it.
For instance
, many
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 painters sell arts for an affordable price, because their goal is basically to share a gift with the world.
However
, despite not being the only reason, money, indeed, is important. Relishing
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a
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 house and a nice car is not a crime, and enhance the quality of life.
Furthermore
,
although
 people might not be aiming at a huge wage, those who offer a service of excellence will, inevitably, be noted and get rewarded with a satisfactory salary. To conclude, I somewhat disagree that financial matter is the only motivation to work properly, as following a dream career and helping other beings could lead to a great job.
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