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Many people believe that using a bicycle as your main form of transport has a lot of advantages whereas others think that it has many disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While some persons are of the claim, and I personally concur, that the
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 as the primary means of transportation has a lot of benefits, others would argue that it has many drawbacks.
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. On the one hand, many are of the suggestion that not being able to be utilized by all is a demerit worthy of note .
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 to say that, because of its small base of support, they are of the opinion that individuals with
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disability
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 cannot
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 them to commute themselves. In the case of an individual with
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, they would find it extremely difficult to commute themselves using a bicycle. Due to its structure, they are of the claim that it won't benefit some target population.
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, I do not agree with
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 form of device as the major means of transportation is environmentally friendly, which is one of its paramount merits.
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 is because relative to other means of transport, it does not burn fossil fuel, which releases carbon dioxide and increases the effects of global warming.
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, countries like Netherlands and United Kingdom encourages
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 citizens to make
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 form of transportation as it helps to reduce the effects of climate change. Due to the fact
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 aid in tackling the problems related to global warming, I am of
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 that its utilization has more benefits to offer. In conclusion, despite the fact that it has a small base of support and cannot be utilized by all as proposed by many, I do not concur as adjustments can be made to suit all.
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 , it has been proven to be relatively safe for the environment.
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