Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by many that in order to challenge the most health problem due to widespread use of
sugar
in man-made
products
and reduce the consumption of it by humans it is preferable to increase
prices
for these
sugar
-containing
products
. I strongly agree that
this
measure may be effective for solving a problem with health as it will mitigate the availability of
such
products
for most consumers.
However
,
this
decision must be supported by a set of additional measures,
such
as lowering
prices
for natural
products
, including vegetables and fruits, as well as widespread promoting of a healthy lifestyle.
To begin
with, one of the reasons why introducing a «
sugar
tax» may be effective for decreasing the consumption of manufactured
products
with
sugar
is that the family budget is usually limited, and there is a list of essential
products
,
such
as milk and bread, while junk
food
is often bought
additionally
.
Thus
the high price of sweets, snacks and drinks will be a kind of restriction in
the
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daily.
As a result
, it will contribute not only to decreasing diseases like obesity or diabetes but
also
to encourage people to eat more healthy and natural nutrition.
For instance
, these measures of increasing tobacco taxation, passed on to consumers in the form of higher cigarette
prices
, have been recognized as one of the most effective population-based strategies for decreasing smoking in Kazakhstan for the
last
years.
However
,
this
measure to reduce intake of
sugar
by implementing taxation on it should be as a part of a comprehensive strategy aimed not only at promoting healthy nutrition and lifestyle but
also
at raising the affordability of natural fruits and vegetables, which is often not available for the most people due to their high
prices
. As a consequence,
this
may lead to the formation of healthy eating behaviour and redistribution of the family grocery basket, where junk
food
will be replaced by fresh fruits and vegetables.
For example
, farmer markets in Almaty, where local farmers offer their
products
at lower
prices
, are very popular among the local population, which undoubtedly contributes not only to the consumption of healthy
food
but
also
to an overall healthy lifestyle. In conclusion, I am firmly convinced that price incrementation on
sugar
-containing
food
should not be overlooked.
That is
due to the fact that cheap junk
food
stimulates to buy more manufacturing
products
rather than natural farmer production.
Nevertheless
,
this
way of reducing
sugar
intake alone may not be effective and should organize along with other comprehensive measures for forming a healthy nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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