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some people believe that carrying cash should not be necessary and all payments ought to be digital. Others argue that having paper money still has benefits. What do you believe and why? Give reason for your answer, and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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While some persons are of the opinion and I personally agree that holding physical money is not important and that all forms of bills should be paid online, many are of the claim that the
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 of paper money still has its merits.
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. On the one hand, lack of network in some regions is the main reason while some people are of the belief that the
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 of
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 still has its benefits. They are of the suggestion that not all areas around the globe have networks to carry out online transactions and
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 the need to hold capital.
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, only about half of the world's population make
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 of the internet, as reported by the daily magazine early
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 of the internet is not common around the world, they opine that the
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 of
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 would still be beneficial in some regions.
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, others would argue and I concur that payments should be digital because it is convenient.
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 is because, unlike with using
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 where one would need to join long queues in the banking hall in other to withdraw their funds, bills can be made within seconds using one's mobile device.
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, the result of a study carried out by a professor of finance showed that a significant proportion of individuals prefer the
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 of online banking relative to holding physical capital because of its convenience. Due to the fact that payment for goods and items can be made easily and with less stress, I am of the notion that payments should be made digitally. In conclusion, despite the fact that many prefer the
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 of physical
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 because of the lack of cellular service in some parts of the world, I strongly
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 that the
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 of online payment platforms is more convenient.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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