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Many small business are being forced to close because they are unable compete with multinational corporation? what problems does this cause and how can problems be solved?

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In the
last
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 decade, a plethora of
companies
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 started their own business. Unfortunately, since start-up
companies
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 cannot compete with high-tech organizations, they
are tend
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 to get off from the business.
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 has caused some sort of issues in
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society, and the ramifications cannot be ignored.
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 essay will advocate the causes and provide solutions. Nowadays, most of the graduates want to be an entrepreneur. Apparently, when the small
companies
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 are forced to close, they cause
lake
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 of job opportunities most probably they would not prefer a fresher to placed in their company.
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, start-up
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 train and malleable the employees ideally to develop the skills.
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, due to
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 down of small businesses, the nation's 6level will be diminishing. Simultaneously, the poverty rate will be increasing. To overcome the problem faced by small organization's owners, to support them the government has to provide subsidies for the start-up
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 to sustain
in
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 the market.
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, limiting the source of international
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 and encouraging the national
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 will create employment opportunities for national people, so that country's finance will drastically grow,
poverty
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the poverty
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 rate will be slumped down.
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, the American government appreciates all start-up
companies
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 in the past era. Right now,
American
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 market is ruling
on
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 other nations. To conclude,
growth
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the growth
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 of a developing country can be determined by globalization.
Closing
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The closing
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 of small businesses can cause detrimental effects in the nation. To me, same as the multi-national
companies
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, small
companies
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 have to be treated in a positive way. .
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