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A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives. Do you agree that living in a computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.

Technological intervention is taking place in every sector
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 our lives,
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, it
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 a vital role in human’s everyday lives
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 of people
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 that living in the modern age has its benefits
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 some oppose
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, the invention of computers has been proved a boon for mankind, as it makes our lives smoother than in the past era.
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, the majority of people have been depending on
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 developed technology like mobile phones and computers since communication becomes effortless with the help of those devices.
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it
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, radio signals are a foundation of
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 facility which is like
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 cake”. conversation with our loved
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, it helps to mitigate the burning issue of global warming, because digital storage is playing lion’s share to reduce the usage of paper.
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, data storage and finding records
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 convenient for everyone.
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, we have access to our documents across the world. Each coin has two sides, the same as technology has a negative side, too. It is well said that “excessive use of anything is bad”.
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, the massive use of digital gadgets brings numerous health issue like cervical problems, since the new generation extensively operate their cell phones which is a root cause
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 the pain of the spinal cord.
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, nowadays many youngsters have
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 neck’ problem. In conclusion,
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 advantages
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 and backbone for humans.
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, its negative side cannot be avoided.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependent on technology
  • digital platforms
  • instant communication
  • automation
  • advanced software solutions
  • access to information
  • educational resources
  • screen time
  • health issues
  • eye strain
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • privacy concerns
  • cybersecurity threats
  • identity theft
  • data breaches
  • overreliance
  • face-to-face social interactions
  • social skills
  • isolation
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