Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people argue convincingly that some
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in economic, scientific studies and academic areas could be shared openly. Whereas others consider that specific data could not be spread. I am inclined to believe that it is better to keep some useful
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and do not allow it to spread widely. For the purpose of
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essay, two opposing positions will be scrutinized. There is no doubt that in the modern world new ideas appear (show up?) almost every day.
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why sharing
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a pivotal role in social communication because it helps us to be aware as well as updated
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inventions around us.
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, it is crucial to show your results of work to other individuals because they might give you feedbacks which contributing to
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your work.
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, I tend to think that
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reasons are essential in both studies and business. Turning to the other side of the argument, sharing some
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could not be profitable/ beneficial.
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, some data regarding business finances should be kept confidential by companies to stay ahead of the competition. Since sharing
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may suffer major financial loss for the company as well as reduction of its competitive edge.
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should be held within the company and distributed only among employees (staff members ?). In conclusion, after analysing the subject in detail, I would like to highlight that it is undoubtedly important for the world to share knowledge regarding science and business.
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, it is equally crucial to safeguard the
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could be useful and significant to companies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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