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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The bar graph elucidates differences in the employment proportion in both genders of six different nations between two individual time periods. At a cursory glance, it is clearly seen that job sectors were dominated by males in 1995 and 2005. Interestingly, women’s figures witnessed an improvement over the given period of time. Regarding females’ contribution, both Australia and New Zealand stood at the bottom level in 1995 just above 25%.
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 worked, followed by about 40% was in both the USA and Iceland. After 10 years, the six countries had experienced impressive growth of women labourers, especially in New Zealand, where the increase was almost double. In 1995, of the given countries, male workers were more than half of their total population. The figure for Iceland was around three-fourth while others remained ranging from 55%- 62%. The same trend was continued even after
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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