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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

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These days, there has been a heated argument about the usage of the
Internet
 by Learners. Some people claim that using the
internet
 in the educational field should be limited. From my point of view technology especially, the
internet
 meditational process easier than before. I support
this
 view and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs. In the
first
 place,
although
 the
internet
 has some negative effects, it is a very useful tool for the scholastic approach. ,
Furthermore
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 it gives the Learners the opportunity to be familiar with technology during studying
time
, it is simply to do two things at one
time
 with a single action.
In addition
, the
time
 has been saved for many students by using the
internet
,
also
 teachers have become more creative in their teaching way.
secondly
, as several things in life young people should be under parents control while using it and
internet
 is one of these things.
Nevertheless
, there are several sites that provide educational services
such
 as, online books, graphics, quizzes and other different services. The computer world gives us the chance to meet and learn all kinds of knowledge and as a teacher
i
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 want my pupils to experiment with that. Teaching methods have been improved since the involvement of the
internet
. In conclusion,
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 strongly believe that the
internet
 is a great addition to the educational field despite the other negative aspects. But using
this
 tool should be under the guidance of parents and teachers to avoid the wrong use. Students need an intervention to make the education process easy in the
time
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 development and science.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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