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Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?

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Extreme
activities
such
 as hang-gliding and mountain climbing are recently embarked by many
individuals
,
as a result
 of the pleasure derived from them. In my opinion, these
life threatening
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life-threatening
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 experiences should not be considered as good because of the
unforseen
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unforeseen
 circumstances that can emerge from
it
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them
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.
Individuals
 actually venture into these
activities
 because of the fun derived from them. The happiness experienced from
such
act
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an act
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 serves as a relief to some persons, setting their minds off the worries and tragedies of life. To elaborate
further
, every now and
then
 you see families, groups or
course mates
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coursemates
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 engaging themselves in what is normally termed hiking, just to ease off and have fun without being aware of the negative implication of
such
activities
.
Such
 risks should not be welcomed and should be jettisoned with ardour from
the
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apply
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society.
This
 is because of the unplanned circumstances that might result from these involvements,
such
 as fatal accidents, which can lead to
life threatening
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life-threatening
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 injuries.
In addition
, dangerous, vigorous and fierce animals can attack these hikers as prey, causing severe harm to their health. An observation made in China indicates that most
individuals
 that undertake these journeys come back extremely injured and end up being admitted
in
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hospital
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a hospital
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 for expert management. The incredible situation here is that most of these adventurers are often obdurate when advised not to embark on those
activities
 because of the satisfaction they derive from
it
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them
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. In conclusion,
individuals
 get attracted to these very dangerous acts,
such
 as hang-gliding and going up the mountain
as a result
 of the contentment gotten from them,
however
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,however
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such
 experiences are not to be termed good, as they can lead to accidents and hamper healthy living.
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