In some countries, advertisers increase the amount of advertising which try to persuade children to buy snacks, toys, and other goods. Parents object to such pressure on children. but some advertisers claim that there is useful information in the advertisements. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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increase. Despite the fact that some ads
can be useful for knowing some products
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objetive
is selling and not always they will focus on the useful information of their Correct your spelling
objective
products
.
When we talk about selling products
like toys or snacks companies dont
try to focus on the advantage of their Correct your spelling
don't
products
over the competence. They always emphasis
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making Change preposition
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this
cheerful and animated advertisements to Correct determiner usage
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try
persuade the children. Add the particle
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kids
enjoying their product
. The problem with this
is that a lot of times they dont
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don't
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about
product
from a point of view of if this
is good or not for their kids
. In addition
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differentiate
this
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ads
and they may have the wrong idea of some product
.
On the other hand
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that is
useful for us. For example
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, they used to shown
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kids
having fun and saying how nice was the whatever
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product
. Now they focus a lot in
showing more information for the parents about the quality of their Change preposition
on
product
in aspects of nutrition values and ingredients.
To sum up, It is true that the number of ads
is increasing and their main objective is to sell more but because consumers are asking for more they are adapting to this
, trying to sell their product
showing why their product
is good and suitable for kids
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