Many people believe that social networking sites like Facebook have had a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Nowadays social
media
become so important for some people
especially Facebook
. Hence
, there are lots of beliefs that Facebook
had a negative impact for
ushers. Change preposition
on
Facebook
was built for the purpose to get connected to other people
or to
old friends. Replace the word
too
However
, now Facebook
has more functions than that. Some people
try to get benefit
from Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
Facebook
and they like to send scams through social media
. I absolutely agree with the statement and I will explain my point of view about this
statement.
Lots of fraud
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fraudulent
informations
are found Change the wording
information
pieces of information
in
social Change preposition
on
media
especially in
Change preposition
on
Facebook
. Their main purpose are
to send invalid Change the verb form
is
information
or as known as "hoax" to innocent people
so that victims trust to
them and forward Change preposition
apply
those fraud
Change the determiner
that fraud information
information
to others people
. People
should be careful to use social media
. Every
Correct quantifier usage
All
informations
that had been shared are not 100% validChange the wording
information
pieces of information
,
so that it is important to know the validation of the Remove the comma
apply
information
.
People
likely to share their personal information
without knowing that it is risky. For example
, people
share their pictures on Facebook
and on the picture showing their address, credit card number, etc. Scammers will see it as opportunity
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an opportunity
the opportunity
to
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apply
them
to steal their money through their credit card number. Correct pronoun usage
apply
People
should be careful on
how the pictures they wanted to share look like. If it is showing personal Change preposition
about
information
, it is not supppose
to be shared so that it saves them from scammers.
Correct your spelling
supposed
suppose
Facebook
can be accessed every
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on every
devices
. Change to a singular noun
device
People
tend to use many devices to log in to their Facebook
account. So that if they change their device and they forget to log out, a new hand user of their device still can access their Facebook
account. In some cases, they will send wrong informations
to their Change the wording
information
pieces of information
Facebook
friends and ask for money. In terms of changing device, do not forget to always log out from you
Change the pronoun
your
Facebook
account.
In conclusion, as the internet now is so advanced and people
nowadays are so smart about technology, it is important to protect our personal information
from social media
especially Facebook
to avoid the problems that might happen in the future. Lastly
, there are so many advantages and disadvantages of using social media
especially Facebook
, so people
should be aware of these in order to avoid the negative impacts of being a user on social media
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