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In many countries, students attend private 'cram schools' for extra coaching in test-taking techniques. What is your view of this practice?

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student
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,
craming
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cramming
 is seen as the best method to study in the urgent
time
 near the day test. I agree
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 the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 way in the eye of a pupil in the university. On the one hand, cram
school
 is the
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 choice for any examinees that have no
knowledge
 for the exam because of its positive consequences.
First
 of all, the clear support that
this
school
 gives is
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time
 for
practicing
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 and
higher
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 chance to get a good mark. In fact, almost
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knowledge
are
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 summed by cram schools and these are the most important
knowledge
 of the lessons which are
teached
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 at public
school
, so that, learners might have a chance to achieve good performance.
Secondly
, pupils have more
concentrations
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 in
practicing
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time
. As is easily seen, because
this
 strategy applied at a near-day-test moment, these ones tend to be more concentrated and make more efforts on
knowledge
.
On the other hand
, cramming study methods
also
 bring some drawbacks. To elaborate, wasting
time
 and money is the clearest disadvantage. Except
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 the amount of money and
time
 studying at state
school
, crammers are burning these,especially effort to learn again without ensuring to get
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 score.
Moreover
, the load of
knowledge
 is too numerous and heavy.
For example
, the
knowledge
 in the university is various from a lot of fields, as
such
 , the cramming way makes the practice of the
pupils
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 university less effective and might put more stress on them. Bottom line, getting many lessons in
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time
 is good or bad which is dependent on those who take it. Crammer should take account
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this
 one to get
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 they want.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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