You recently visited a public library in your town and found some facilities were not in good condition. Write a letter to the library manager. In your letter: Describe the problems you found Explain how these problems affected your visit Suggest what the library should do to improve

Dear Sir or Madam, I am a member of the Cole
Library
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, and I am writing
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letter to express my concern about the poor condition of some facilities at
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public place.
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this
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place offers a wide variety of books ranging from historical to original novels, some problems dissuade many people from visiting
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place. First and foremost, the elevator is out of order, which makes it impossible for disabled people, including my best friend, to visit
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library
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.
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, some furniture is not in good condition,
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legs of some chairs are broken, which has made them completely unusable.
Due to
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these unfavourable conditions, my friend and I cannot visit
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precious
library
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as much as we love to. Unfortunately,
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I really like to read books at a comfortable and quiet
library
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, where I can focus, sometimes I have to just borrow some books and read them at home.
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, I highly expect your kind attention to
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matter
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public space should be accessible to everyone.
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, I believe the elevator should be fixed as soon as possible.
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, I would like to suggest that the management either repair or replace the old and damaged furniture. Thank you in advance , and I look forward to your cooperation in
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matter. Yours faithfully Tina Ross

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Coherence
Make sure to clearly support your main points with examples or details.
Cohesion
Try to connect your ideas with linking words to improve flow.
Task Achievement
You have clearly described the problems with the library facilities.
Coherence
Your letter has a clear structure with a proper greeting and closing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
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  • for example
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  • even though
  • despite
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