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People have different views about whether increasing the driving licenses age or streets' infrastructure is the best way to make roads safety.

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People
 have different views about whether increasing the driving licenses age or streets' infrastructure is the best way to make roads safe.While strict licenses rule sometimes be useful, I believe that increasing
road
 quality is more important. On the one hand, raising the age at which
people
 can drive can be a great source for drop
accidents
. When a teenager drives a car while drinking alcohol and has no experience on the
road
 so he may
cause
 an
accident
. Teenagers are notoriously irresponsible and they can't handle alcohol while driving. A person who drunk has more chance to
cause
 an
accident
, but it is more dangerous if he has inexperienced in terms of both alcohol and driving.
On the other hand
, it is perhaps even more important to improving
road
 safety for all the
people
 who drive. The
accidents
 are caused due to young drivers but the only factors that
cause
 most of the
accidents
' sources are how the roads have been planned.
For example
, if a driver has very enough skill to drive on the
road
 but because of the
road
 ,errors may
cause
 the
accident
. The urban areas should be constructed on one-way roads and must have a broken tone. It may be inconvenient but it is the best way to reduce hazard rates. Building parallel streets can give lower
accident
 results than the ordinary and should have motorcycle boulevards separately. When cities around the world construct a number of one-way streets it will decline
accidents
. In conclusion, I can understand why
people
 might want to encourage the minimum legal age for driving cars, but it seems to me that increase
road
 safety is much more important in everyone's life.
Submitted by Shwe Yamin on

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