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Tourism is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries, but its disadvantages should not be overlooked?to what extant do you agree or disagree

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Many counties develop the new income opportunity
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 as travel industry is become one of the popular items, while there are some drawbacks we should take in
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serious consideration. I totally agree with
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 with, the most significant drawback to the counties which choose to open up the
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 industry is the
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 makes the place over crowed especially in the hot spot of
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 it leads the
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 who live in
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 area in an inconvenience situation.
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, I live in a popular
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 town called Margaret River, every time during the school holiday my town is full of
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 and car, which is distrust our daily life
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 we cannot find a car park while we go into town.
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, the country original culture will disappear rapidly if it overdeveloped
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 because the local
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 will be influenced by
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. Sometimes it might lead into a good way influence,
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, for the long-turn effect in most situations it leads to a bad influence result
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 as the residences they lose their feature.
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, according to the BBC docurmandry reported that in Africa the capital city
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 lose their traditional culture rapidly because the government promoting their region to
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 since 2007.
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, we should take seriously the environmental pollution by
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,
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 as air pollution, the household waste items. The waste staff will increase by the increased
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,because as more
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 make more rubbish.And
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, the air pollution will go badly when more
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 travel to the stage
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 because they increase the public transport and the private car in use. To sum up, I believe that the increasing
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 might bring some benefits to the country or area,
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, it brings significant drawbacks to the nation are outweigh than the advantages.
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